Bad Girls Don't Die - Sumer Blog 3 7/5/15

Writting Prompt: If you could change what you're reading, how would you change it?

          Just so the reader understands, this book is about a family who lives in an old house. Long ago at this house, a little girl died because of some school kids that thought she was a witch, and was weird because she over obsessed with dolls, which was inappropriate for her age. The family that lives there now is not ordinary. The mom is always working, the oldest daughter is semi-goth and is rebellious, the youngest girl, though 13, is over obsessed with dolls, and acts like a little kid. The dad seems to be disliked, or ignored, most of the time, by the rest of the family. Recently the 13 year old has been changing. Her blue eyes go green sometimes, she starts to talk with lauguage that hasn't been used in many years, and she can't remember her actions sometimes.

          Something I would change is the length it took for the story to get interesting. I felt the build up time to the interesting parts took too long, and I was starting to get bored with the book, when I had barley started. It almost took 100 pages for he story to take off. This isn't the the first time this has happened, but in the long run, the very long build up helps me understand the story more. Though the long build up can be helpful, it can be annoying and uninteresting, that's why I would change that part.

          Another thing I would change is the amount of explanation used for Alexis, the semi-goth, rebelious oldest daughter. She has pink hair, is very rebelious, and hangs out with the "Death Squad". This sounds like someone who might be the goth type, yet she is described as a person who will not wear all black, or all the black, dark stuff, that people would expect. Especially not go to the extremes (spiked necklaces, black veils with spiders on it, etc.) Like her "best friend". I would change it so she was expliained a little more. Maybe her styles, or her attitude. Something that will make me understand Alexis al little more.

          Though there are things that I might think of changing, I would rather have this book just the way it is, then change anything about. The unexplained things, the over exlplained things, the unnecessary things, are all part of the book, and I wouldn't change a thing about it.